Our hero finds himself almost perfectly where he means to be. His heeled boots click-clack in time with the fall of his cane, click-clack, click-clack. His overcoat is thick, jet black, and if you ask me, rather the mystery. The kind of coat a secret man might wear to do secret things at precise times, moving concealed with only the click-clack of his secret mind to reveal him. His coat obscures what was once no doubt the brightest wool suit you’ve ever seen, the sort one might exclaim was worn by only the dapperest of tick-tock click-clack men. Time has made it more secretly loud, more quietly pronounced. And in the front pocket of his vest, a pocket watch with no tick-tocks left but the ones he gives it. This cleverly coifed gentleman of his own era smiles as he reaches for his quiet companion, the skin tearing ever-so-slightly from his most beautiful Chelsea grin, the knife pattern arcing gracefully from lip to ear to mid-cheek in a loop. If one asked me and demanded my impression, I would perhaps say that it was the brushstroke of an artist on his most personal canvas. Or I might just giggle.

"The most perfect time to be exactly where I mean to," he says with his wide smile, looking up in time to see the grille of the van.

He does not feel the impact, nor does he take note of the way his feet sweep ever so daintily off the sidewalk. He certainly can’t hear the crash of the glass doors, little bits of art tinkling across the stone lobby floor like dancers in a final number. He does not notice the horrified, frozen quiet of these silents, these gallery critics that don’t know brilliance when it lands at their feet. They don’t have click-clack minds at all, just schemes and clumsy knives and smiles full of fake teeth.

The truth is that our hero perceives not a bit of this, as he is much too busy preening for this display, bones snapping dramatically, blood rushing to be in place, skin tearing dutifully for this mad show.

The van skids to a halt and the driver, his stage hand and partner, his enormous Russian man with sad eyes and a rather masky frown, his Dear Alexei, exits the vehicle and promptly goes to work. Opening the rear doors and removing an enormous sledgehammer, long and heavy and loaded with all sorts of ill intent, bearing the faces of his unloving mother and overly amorous father, their theatre now closed. With a swing he rearranges the face of the nearest guard, too conflicted between trying to act and trying to grasp. His body falls in a limp bow, another actor making his exit.

Our hero pulls his body, unbreaking and sadly losing beauty, back together again and says, "I’m looking for the green-eyed man."

Comments

Travis said…
I LIKE IT BUT I DON'T QUITE GET IT IN ITS ENTIRETY

IM 70-75 PERCENT ON BOARD WITH CONTENT BUT REQUESTING CLARIFICATION



GREEN EYED MAN!?!?!
Bryan said…
That would be one Gregory Stenn.
Anonymous said…
you know what is going to make this story so interesting? the way the writing style changes for every character. you don't get that very often. I was thinking to myself the whole time "this is going to be a fucking blast to draw" not because its going to be hard (it will be very hard) but because it will be a great scene that will stick out from the rest because it is so different in how it is written. point is i love it.
Bryan said…
I was just thinking about that myself. The amount of distance between Stenn and Jack for example is really extreme. One person is a bastion of moral sanctity, the other is a sarcastic, dark-hearted bastard, and because of the narrative their differences are more apparent than I think they would normally be, since you spend the entire time in their respective heads.
Bryan said…
Also, some of the bolding feels redundant because for some reason the formatting of this site doesn't allow me to underline text. It looks better on MS Word.
Brian said…
I'm liking the word usage and structure.
Anonymous said…
Nice, I really like the feel of this. I have not read enough to see your writing change between each character but if you are able to achieve that, and do it well, then I applaud you. It will make for quite an amazing read when it is all finally assembled.
Anonymous said…
whats great is i can see the subtle differences in how id want to draw it, not only will the different characters read different but the angles and panel work will play off those differences. like seeing the world through their eyes. the more i think about it the more i like. god i wish i had the time i need to really work on this right now.
Travis said…
Yeah I like it! It reads like real insanity.

Also I wish you would have prefaced this entry as being part of the story you're writing. But that's just me.

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